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demeter918) wrote2007-05-10 10:38 am
demeter918) wrote2007-05-10 10:38 am
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writing pet peeve
I think, if there's anything that will instantly annoy me in writing, there's nothing like the line of,
a single tear glistened on her cheek
or
a lonely tear rolled down her face
or
how does a person squeeze one tear out? how about the other eye? You can't make just one eye have a tear!
... oh, wait. That's my line. ;)
I don't know what about it annoys me so much, but it does. Everytime I read it in a fic, I either start snickering, completely breaking the mood or I roll my eyes. I think I've done it before, which makes it all the more annoying. I just realized I had this annoyance when I was reading a FFX fic, and a line like that popped up on the end of what was a decent fic, and it lost me. It just lost me in a way that nothing else has lost me. No, seriously. You could insert an author's line in the middle of a fic (I don't know why, but I find these hilarious!) and it never bothered me in the way that the 'single lonely tear' did.
Methinks my eccentricities have come into play again.
a single tear glistened on her cheek
or
a lonely tear rolled down her face
or
how does a person squeeze one tear out? how about the other eye? You can't make just one eye have a tear!
... oh, wait. That's my line. ;)
I don't know what about it annoys me so much, but it does. Everytime I read it in a fic, I either start snickering, completely breaking the mood or I roll my eyes. I think I've done it before, which makes it all the more annoying. I just realized I had this annoyance when I was reading a FFX fic, and a line like that popped up on the end of what was a decent fic, and it lost me. It just lost me in a way that nothing else has lost me. No, seriously. You could insert an author's line in the middle of a fic (I don't know why, but I find these hilarious!) and it never bothered me in the way that the 'single lonely tear' did.
Methinks my eccentricities have come into play again.
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GREEN ORBS?
I remember when everyone was describing Kurama's eyes as emerald green, or Heero's eyes as Prussian blue or... yes, and orbs are amazingly, more annoying than that.
ORBS.